The humiliation aspect came through through very well in this story. I thought it was really well done.
One thing that I might suggest that I get this suggestion because I am blind and I have to listen to the stories. I have someone who types my stories for me whether or not I am dictating the story or I am using my brailler. But I always listen to my stories just like I listen to all the stories here. What that can do for you is allow the errors that you make with spelling or Google makes with spelling and inserting its own words scream out at you and say hey this is wrong!
There are a couple of articles missing as I’m listening along and a misplaced word or two. I only mentioned this to be helpful.
I love the story and it was very entertaining and I hope it did well in the competition.